I, Senryu
Most of us are familiar with the three-line haiku, a breath of nature whispered into the in-between spaces of our existence. Senryu is not that type of poem. It looks you in the eye and winks. It’s known as haiku’s comic cousin. Sometimes it’s more like haiku’s sarcastic cousin.
I first wrote senryu in that elementary school class. In Pegasus, I have one senryu about strawberry shortcake and one about the joys of reading — two things I still enjoy. But my poems were too sincere for a proper senryu.
Unlike haiku, senryu does not have to be about nature, although it’s often about human nature. Like haiku, it follows the same number of lines and syllables and does not include a title.
Line 1: 5 syllables
Line 2: 7 syllables
Line 3: 5 syllables
Here is a senryu that doesn’t follow all the rules but does contain the poem’s trademark humor.
A mockingbird
pecking at popcorn mocks
the old guy texting.
– Kimiko Hahn
My senryu “Blinded” from Rainbow Crow rhymes, even though rhymes are not generally a part of this form. But it’s your poem. You can rhyme if you want to.
Blinded
Foolish trusting boy
Left his glasses out for me
Now I see as he
I tried my hand at writing a story (or two, or three) about the crow who stole my son’s glasses, but they never worked. Then I thought of writing the encounter as a haiku. I soon realized what I had was not the lyrical beauty of a haiku, but the sneer of a senryu.
One aspect of the haiku I kept was the turn, the kireji. This pivot occurs between line 1 and 2 or between line 2 and 3. After I wrote the first two lines, I asked myself, Why would a crow steal glasses? The answer came immediately: Maybe he wanted to see.
Your turn: Write a Senryu
Think of an experience you want to remember. Write it in three lines, following the 5-7-5 formula. Now look at your poem again and see where you might change it to be a little more comic or ironic. If it helps, ask “why” about the beginning of the poem (the way I asked why a crow would steal glasses), to get your answer in the second half.
Photo by Tambako the Jaguar, Creative Commons, via Flickr. Post by Megan Willome.
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Bethany R. says
“Blinded” made me smile. Such a fun form, thanks for this!
Megan Willome says
Thank you! It remains one of my favorite poems in the book, since it describes the even that started it all.
Plus, this is my favorite illustration because it shows the rainbow colors in the crow’s feathers, if we’ll only pause and look.